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Friday, 2 September 2016

WALT : write an accurate sentence with full stops and capitals.

The Circle Of Life
Cookie style
By Abby Tombs

1.Unigirl is mixing the cookies.
Unigirl is mixing the cookies while dribbly sweat trickled down her arms. She was wiping her brow constantly.

2. Unigirl was shaping the cookies.
Unigirl was shaping the cookies while her brother Uniboy was screaming  in her, wornout ears.

3.Unigirl put the cookies in the oven.
Unigirl put the astonishing cookies in the oven while her arm burnt on the boiling oven. OOW!

4.Unigirl placed the cookies on a plate.
Unigirl placed the cookies on the table while Unigirl fainted. Making cookies for a new B is hard as! Dig in everyone.

2 comments:

  1. I love your little cookies ingredients!one day I might bake cookies with my aunt

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  2. Ki Ora Abby it's Chloe W. I really like how you used adjectives to describe what she was doing it really added more information. It reminds me of when I baked cookies with my Mum and it was so funny just like this story. Next time you could try adding a bit more nouns but without them it was great.

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